Please sir check my design

Please provide me suggestions and feedbacks on #21647391 so that I can provide a better design for your brand.

Hello owner of the contest, low ratings - one and two stars only demotivate designers to participate with new projects. Because low ratings lead the designer's rating to a crash. If you do not like a design, you better don't give any star or eliminate it without putting one or two stars. Thank you for your understanding