Please sir check my new design #22062011, #22062012

Please check my design #22111490 and give some feedback o it. If you don't like the design please eliminate it. Don't need to give poor ratings. Thanks in advance.

Hello all, thank you for all your submissions and my apologies that I could not provide feedback on all the designs. So many of them were great but I have now selected a 1st and 2nd place. Thank you again.