Please provide feedback on my design..

Hello, Please kindly check my submission #28448859. I would really appreciate if you could provide feedback on the design. Thank you.

Dear Honorable Sir,

Have a great day.

possible feedback on my design #28449402 would be much-appreciated .

I hope you'll love my concept.

Please don't be hesitate to ask for revision if you need any changes.

Regards.

(In case if you don't like my concept, Just let me know I'll go with a different approach)